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I love you,
Of course I love you,
I’ve loved you from the start,
And I’ll love you to the end,
I’ll love through out all of the in-betweens,
In face of faults and demise,
Come now we’ll stay ahead,
Of this fight or flight attitude,
Even when we cannot escape,
I will hold out my hand,
Covered in bloody bandage,
To you who seems to have,
Lost their sight of way this day,
And we will say what is to be said,
Moving past and then ahead again,
Of the edged of instinct branded in mind,
Determining when to stop and when to fly,
We’ll move together as one does of two,
Shifting past the moments of the in-betweens,
Where in each of those looking glasses,
We can see partial dreams of what could be,
Of what will be if we but choose it so,
Turn together in perfect harmony,
Of the future that we silently agree,
Our mended hearts shooting forth upon its destined course,
Into and then past the encrypted path,
Falling into each others ends,
With I love you our only suspended band.
©2008-2010 *KikuFire
:iconkikufire:

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:D I really like this one :) for the words i used, and how i used them and everything! :) hehe

TELL ME WHAT YOU THINK, PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE!!!
And i mean really tell me what you think, not just 'oh, its nice, i like it!"

CRITIQUE PLEASE!~!!!

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:iconsoulfood4u:
when i read this i imagine standing on a beach, and the first few sentences are behind me, in the parkinglot, and the middle sentences are the present, the beach, and then the rest are just watching the sky end at the sunset. very kool.

and i wanna save it, but it sont let meeee T.T

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people say im different~
~people say im strange.
but the reason that they say it~
~is because they're all derranged.

lol

"If the world around you doesnt fit, find the courage to break free!!"
:iconagirlthougths:
i love it ^_^ thats all i can say , very nice job, beautifull

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"Can a heart still breaks when it stoped beating?"

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:iconcrimson-fidelite:
Every word in this reminds me of what it was like to fall in love and go through everything together with somebody who means the world to you...

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life is a kiss away, but death only a breath
:iconkikufire:
*blushes* awww thank you! *smiles* that was the idea when i was writing it, that no matter what, from the start to the end and even farther then that, i'll love him and we'll work at it to be together

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So long as your there,
So long as you want me,
In any which way,
So long as I can see you,
Standing before me,
I'll be here to reach out for you.

:heart:I love you Leon :heart:
:iconkikufire:
:D aww thank you! I'm glad you love it hehe and think thats its beautiful! :)

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So long as your there,
So long as you want me,
In any which way,
So long as I can see you,
Standing before me,
I'll be here to reach out for you.

:heart:I love you Leon :heart:
:iconkikufire:
oh wow really? thats really cool! ^_^ I'm so glad that i was able to create that image in your mind while you read my poem ^_^ hehe

really? did you try refreshing it???

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So long as your there,
So long as you want me,
In any which way,
So long as I can see you,
Standing before me,
I'll be here to reach out for you.

:heart:I love you Leon :heart:
:iconcrimson-fidelite:
Well you did an amazing job :love:

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life is a kiss away, but death only a breath
:iconkikufire:
awww thanks ^//^ hehe

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So long as your there,
So long as you want me,
In any which way,
So long as I can see you,
Standing before me,
I'll be here to reach out for you.

:heart:I love you Leon :heart:
:iconsoulfood4u:
i'll try now, and if it says u gota fav then it worked XD

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people say im different~
~people say im strange.
but the reason that they say it~
~is because they're all derranged.

lol

"If the world around you doesnt fit, find the courage to break free!!"

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