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Tell Me, Do You? by *KikuFire:iconKikuFire:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Romantic > Teen or Young Romance > Open


You’re the air that I breathe, and my every heart beat,
The reason behind every true smile and laugh,
Every moment of happiness and bliss is cuz of you,
Do you understand the things you do to me?

You’re my reason for being in this life,
You’re what I need to survive and live,
You’re the medicine I need when sick,
You’re the comfort I need when in pain,
You’re what I need to be happy,
Do you understand the things you do to me?

Tell me, do you understand how happy you make me?
Tell me, do you understand how much I truly love you?
Tell me, do you understand how much I miss you when you’re gone?
Tell me do you understand how I dream about us together at night?
©2008-2010 *KikuFire
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I know the title sucks, but just read the thing. I know its mostly questions but all well.

AND COMMENT!!!

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~CelestialFairy79 Jan 8, 2008, 12:35:44 PM
lol i like it, you are just trying to make the one your love realize how much you care.

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~We all have wings~
CFairy79
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~SilverRoseJewelry Jan 8, 2008, 5:02:37 PM
I really like the way that the wording subtly and yet bluntly at the same time explain your feelings. Are you going to share this one with him?

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“It seems that the sky is the bluest the furthest away so that we may always strive to reach it.”
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~PnyGrl596 Jan 8, 2008, 9:19:01 PM
you true love for him shows in all your poetry:nod: awesome job girl!:glomp:

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Literature adds to reality, it does not simply describe it. It enriches the necessary competencies that daily life requires and provides; and in this respect, it irrigates the deserts that our lives have already become.~C S Lewis quoted by Paul Holmer
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*KikuFire Jan 9, 2008, 2:04:57 PM
Yeah it does, thank you! ^_^ :hug:

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Your the greatest babe,
perfections and imperfections,
I love you Leon,
I’ll love you and be with you to the end of all ends,
and though the birth of all births. :heart:
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*KikuFire Jan 9, 2008, 2:05:57 PM
Well submitting it here lets him see it, so yeah i have.

Thanks, but what do you mean by subtly and yet bluntly??

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Your the greatest babe,
perfections and imperfections,
I love you Leon,
I’ll love you and be with you to the end of all ends,
and though the birth of all births. :heart:
:iconsilverrosejewelry:
~SilverRoseJewelry Jan 9, 2008, 2:29:42 PM
Um, I guess what I mean is it gracefully states what you are trying to say but the way that it is said is really strait forward and easy to understand at the same time.

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“It seems that the sky is the bluest the furthest away so that we may always strive to reach it.”
:iconkikufire:
*KikuFire Jan 9, 2008, 2:36:03 PM
I'm glad you do, lol yeah

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Your the greatest babe,
perfections and imperfections,
I love you Leon,
I’ll love you and be with you to the end of all ends,
and though the birth of all births. :heart:
:iconkikufire:
*KikuFire Jan 9, 2008, 2:42:15 PM
Thank you ^_^ :D

--
Your the greatest babe,
perfections and imperfections,
I love you Leon,
I’ll love you and be with you to the end of all ends,
and though the birth of all births. :heart:
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